The lake splayed before him with the illusion of clear blue waters lapping at a clean-cut shoreline, but underneath, hid the dirt and filth of ancient gods and abandoned second chances.
Evil lurked.
And that was why he sat atop the picnic table, his massive legs propped up on the metal BBQ, listening to the sound of his bowie knife as he stroked it across the wet stone. It prepared his mind, his thoughts, his soul - if he should loose the shattered pieces that were left.
The sun faded to a sliver upon the forest, and that glowing coal of pain, the pain that melted his stomach to the sewage it'd become, began its precursor to the hunt that would soon follow the swallowing of the slivered eye into a black sky.
He'd know precisely the moment of evening, for the frogs would not croak, the birds dare not sing, and the wild life would keep to their caves and burrows. Flames of red and hatred of fire would soon be brewing deep into the heart of the Devil's Eye, the pioneer nickname for the heart of the forest. He chanted the rhyme letting it calm his stomach, and sharpen his mind.
Swift night follows
shrink ye lake
for red oft follow
the devil's sake.
Black tarred spears
dripping with blood
spirals with antlers
the devil's flare flood.
Deep in the heart
of green and pines
they eat of the heart and souls true
mind you, you weary, o soul opine
for the Devil's Eye opens amongst you
Sharpen ye swords and knives of steel
And cut off their heads,
And crimson skin do peel
And when morn awakes and opens the sky
Silent it closes, the Devil's Eye
Shail blinked. Night was upon him. He set the wet stone aside and stood. His chest, bare and massive, inflated with furry. The red beings, holding their catches high and frolicking amongst the tree tops, fled to the heart of the forest, where their triumphs of the day would be sacrificed.
(An excerpt of the novel I’ll be writing during nanowrimo)
20 comments:
Jodi-
This piece is wickedly delicious, made even more so by your devilish prose. supertastic!
Well that's splendidly impressive!
You've got my attention. Looks to be a good read for your project. Thanks for sharing!
This had me completely spellbound.
You know I'm a sucker for a good poem, and you managed to weave one in so easily. The whole Devil's Eye imagery totally creeps me out. I'll take an autographed copy of your book please.
Welcome to #fridayflash, Jodi! The poetry is wonderful.
Thanks Guys! I felt nervous putting this up on my own blog. Don't ask me why. Love reading your flashfriday stories.
I like your lyrical style, at least in part because I cannot write that way :)
Wait though, if you've pre-written part of your nano, aren't you a big cheater? :P
Oh, what are they gonna do, hand cuff me? I'll learn how to type with my toes. ;)
Actually, this is taken from a short story that I decided to write into a novel. I haven't actually begun because I wanted to write it all in a 6 week span of time. I decided to dedicate all of November and half December to that. So...I don't think that counts as cheating. Maybe it does. I've never been very good about following rules. ;)
Thanks for the compliment.
I am enthralled. And the poetry is very nice.
Oh, Nano will be so much fun... Peace, Linda
Lovely, lyrical, wonderful...
Poetry worked very well in story.
Welcome!
Wow Jodi! Shail's sharpened his knife and he's taking off after all the evil in the forest? Feels epic already, can't wait for my copy!
I'm hooked! This sounds like a great project and a great book. I did a character study this week for my NaNo project. It's not cheating, it's just writing. And yours is great.
chris
Great job establishing mood & mystery. And Shail is an awesome character name - I'm totally jealous. I find naming characters most bothersome.
Dark and poetic, and I'm talking about the prose part! Very nicely done. I love your artwork too. The accompanying art is downright disturbing (in a good way). You are obviously a woman of many talents.
See you at NaNo. And in many #fridayflashes to come, I hope.
~jon
Nice one, Jodi, and don't worry, rules are for losers!
I've stuck the old Nano 09 badge up on my blog now. I'm with you buddy! Still have made a firm decision on what novel to write, but the one about pregnant zombies is favourite to win right now.
Is your's going to be about demons? Sounds great.
I look forward to the novel - I love the lyricism of this piece. And you've certainly whet my appetite.
JM ~ Thank you for the compliments! Unfortunetly, the art work is not mine, but I thought it fit well and added mood. Glad you appreciated.
Barry! If in doubt - definitely go with pregnant zombies. Just remember they like sweaters and hot cocoa cause death is cold, but undeath is even colder. ;p Thanks, Buddy!
KJM ~ I'm a huge fan of your twitter haiku. Thanks for stopping by. ;)
Clever Trevor! Thanks. The name is a long story, but I have to agree with you. It's unusual and perfect for this dude.
"And cut off their heads,
And crimson skin do peel.."
These are the trappings of excellent drama. Two thumbs up!
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