Horror.Some think a Mantra can keep it from happening to them, others induce it into sick Halloween Games. It often bumps in the night casting shadows against the walls, hiding under your bed with a knife. Sometimes, though, horror is a simple melt of our vulnerabilities over blistering hot lava.
The only hope is to "FREE MERCURY"
Thank you, as always, to the wonderful editor of Beat to a Pulp, David Cranmer.
Happy Halloween!
10 comments:
Loved tht story. As usual it was extremely well written and the details were just great. This line was spetacular:
"The ravenous polar bears that will cover their black nose in the snow so you won't see them when they are chasing you to eat you."
This is an awesome tale, Jodi.
I love how it constantly flirts with the edge of being out and out bizarre, and then you keep reining it in with the glass and chrome details like the mom fixing her lipstick.
That shows real finesse. Well done!
Just read your story. Could relate to it a little too well, having grown up with a mother who constantly joked about sending me to the "place with the rubber walls."
Have a great Halloween.
Your darkness is so wicked and sharp. This one is like a hard dose of reality, but just slightly surreal enough to allow little short breaths with each passage.
SPR~ Glad you enjoyed that line! It was salvaged from the original story from which this story is written when I first began learning how to write specific rhythmic absurdist style.
Chris~ Glad you enjoyed the mixture of style & detail! It was a real mind bender to write, and I was nervous about how it would be received. Thanks so much
AC ~ STAY AWAY FROM FIRE PLACE POKERS, esp at mom's. ;-) Thanks, bud. I've had a terrific Halloween and hope you did too.
Erin~ Sharp, wicked with room to breath is what I like to hear. Thanks, hon. BTW- I'll be finishing Halloween tonight with reading your book. How appropriate!
Thanks so much for taking time to read and comment on a busy day. Appreciate your support everyone! xx
That one rocks! Whoa.
Typical Jodi - surreal and so full of tension. I love it when you walk that line.
Yes, finesse is the word here. Wonderful repetition through this, giving it that edge of craziness and surreality (is that a word?). Such delicious language too, both alluring and repulsive. Scary and layered.
-Sean
Aww, thanks, Mr.G. ;-)
Laurita~ Love your comment. It encourages me to finish Xscents, ebcause it has the same walking the line/edge that this story does, but in longer form... and I push the limits way further. Thanks for your support. x
Sean ~ I was sorta excited for you to read this. I knew you'd figure out the absurd puzzle within the pulp setting (which I think is what makes it surreal, or is it more the language that tricks the mind into thinking its surreal- I don't know. This story is weird in so many ways.) Thanks so much for the props!
It is always a pleasure to have you at BEAT to a PULP, Jodi. See you again soon, I hope.
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